Post by Alphess Wren on May 2, 2016 23:25:35 GMT -8
This is just a story that I was working on for an English Creative Writing Common Test, but I thought that I could share it with you guys 
I had a foreboding sense that someone was watching me. I stuck a granola bar into my mouth as I packed my water bottles. A glanced over my shoulders and continued to pack my things. I stood up as I remembered that I left my rain jacket upstairs. I left my backpack and ran up the stairs. I saw it hanging on my doorknob and quickly grabbed it. I turned and looked at the flight of stairs that I have to go down to get to the ground floor of the rental house and groaned. Just because I'm fit doesn't mean that I particularly enjoy exercise. I slid down the railing, cheating my way out of exercise. I still had a smile on my face at my small victory when it transformed immediately into one of shock. My best friend Keli had her face squished against the glass of the kitchen window, her face looking like a flattened frog.
"Keli, you almost scared my half to death!" I shouted while hitting the window. She just stood outside the window clutching her stomach laughing. I just sighed and went to open the front door.
"I'm almost done packing for the trek. Just a minute." I said as I opened the door for Keli. She waltzed straight into the house and flopped herself down on the couch. I grabbed a few more granola bars and my survival pack. I hoisted my heavy pack onto my back and made my way out the door, grabbing my keys as I passed them.
"Are you driving or am I?" I asked Keli.
"I am." She replied through a mouthful of trail mix. I nodded and headed to her car. I tossed my pack into the trunk of her Toyota Corolla and headed back to the front. I sat in shotgun and waited for her to do the same. She quickly tossed her bags in the back and jumped into the driver's seat.
"Ready for this hike Jack?" She chatted as she headed out of my driveway.
"Definitely! Rainbow Lake is going to be beautiful!" I replied. I put in my headphones and rested my head back on the head rest.
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"Get up sleepy head! We've got some hiking to do!" Keli shouted in my ear as she smacked my chest with the back of her hand. I grumbled and slid my seat forwards, back to it's original position. I swung myself out of the small car and stumbled around to the trunk. It was already open, as Keli had already taken her pack out. I grabbed my pack and swung the trunk shut.
"Do a check fuzz brain. Make sure you have everything." Keli chided at my groggy figure. I rummaged through my pockets to find my list. I looked over it, mentally checking that I had everything. I nodded my head when I had finished. She nodded back and we set off onto the trail.
We walked in comfortable silence for the first hour of the trek. The scenery was beautiful and the sound of the wilderness surrounded us. We crossed over a river a few times on some sturdy wooden bridge. The sun flickered through the leaves high above us, creating a mottled pattern on the dirt track beneath our feet. The stones under our shoes crunched as we walked over them, a loud sound echoing in the serene silence.
I got a sudden headache and stopped walking. Keli stopped soon after I did and asked, "What's up?" I didn't register her words until about a minute later. A fog was creeping into my mind and it was starting to impair my vision. I could feel my memories getting flushed out of my head as the time progressed. Before I could answer Keli's question, I had already forgotten her name.
The only thing that I could think of to say was,"Who are you?" Keli took a few steps backwards and had a shocked expression on her face. "Are you kidding me Jack? We've known each other since we were three!" She shouted, the sound echoing through the trails. I just shrugged my shoulders embarrassed. The fog in my head had grown so much, that I couldn't remember where I was. I stood up and brushed past the strange girl and said, "Sorry stranger, but I have to get out of here!" She just stared at me slack jawed. I started to stumble further down the trails, but the strange girl that was beside me grasped my arm and started to pull me the other way.
She continued at a fast pace, pulling me blindly down the track. Our heavy breathing was the only sound that I could hear in the wilderness. My dirty hiking sneakers scuffed along the ground as we moved. The small stones stuck out of the ground and they scuttled around as our sneakers cut their way through the dirt. A cloud of dust flew out behind us. The tip of my sneakers caught on a rock jutting out of the earth and the steel grip on my arm vanished as I plummeted towards the ground. My head rebounded off of the track and everything faded into darkness.
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A blinding white light and an annoying, high-pitched beeping noise yanked me out of the darkness. My first instinct was to open my eyes, but the light immediately stabbed them. I hissed and clamped my eyes shut again. I took a deep breath and tried again. I winced when the light punctured my eyes again, but I kept them slightly open and allowed them to adjust. After a few seconds, the pain subsided slightly and I was able to take in my surroundings. I was in a hospital room, as I had predicted, and the walls were a bleak creamy white. Keli sat sleeping in one of the uncomfortable chairs on the other side of the room. I tried to call out to her to ask what happened, but all that came out was a dilapidated croak. I sighed when I looked to my left and saw a small tray with a tiny plastic cup of water. I drank it and scrunched my face up at the taste. It was like it had been sitting there for days, but I know that it only could have been a few hours, as Keli was still in her hiking clothes. I tried calling out to Keli again, and this time I was successful. She snorted and woke up, her sleepy eyes observing her surroundings. She zeroed in on me and jumped out of her chair.
She hugged me tightly and said, "You gave me such a fright! Don't ever do that to me again!" I just hugged her back and said, "I don't know what I did. What happened." She pulled away from the hug and stared me straight in the eyes. She shook her head and and said, "It's a long story." We laughed as she told the story. It only took a few hours for me to be discharged, and as we reached Keli's car, I said, "Let's go hike!" Keli shouted, "No!" We laughed and drove home in good spirits.
I had a foreboding sense that someone was watching me. I stuck a granola bar into my mouth as I packed my water bottles. A glanced over my shoulders and continued to pack my things. I stood up as I remembered that I left my rain jacket upstairs. I left my backpack and ran up the stairs. I saw it hanging on my doorknob and quickly grabbed it. I turned and looked at the flight of stairs that I have to go down to get to the ground floor of the rental house and groaned. Just because I'm fit doesn't mean that I particularly enjoy exercise. I slid down the railing, cheating my way out of exercise. I still had a smile on my face at my small victory when it transformed immediately into one of shock. My best friend Keli had her face squished against the glass of the kitchen window, her face looking like a flattened frog.
"Keli, you almost scared my half to death!" I shouted while hitting the window. She just stood outside the window clutching her stomach laughing. I just sighed and went to open the front door.
"I'm almost done packing for the trek. Just a minute." I said as I opened the door for Keli. She waltzed straight into the house and flopped herself down on the couch. I grabbed a few more granola bars and my survival pack. I hoisted my heavy pack onto my back and made my way out the door, grabbing my keys as I passed them.
"Are you driving or am I?" I asked Keli.
"I am." She replied through a mouthful of trail mix. I nodded and headed to her car. I tossed my pack into the trunk of her Toyota Corolla and headed back to the front. I sat in shotgun and waited for her to do the same. She quickly tossed her bags in the back and jumped into the driver's seat.
"Ready for this hike Jack?" She chatted as she headed out of my driveway.
"Definitely! Rainbow Lake is going to be beautiful!" I replied. I put in my headphones and rested my head back on the head rest.
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"Get up sleepy head! We've got some hiking to do!" Keli shouted in my ear as she smacked my chest with the back of her hand. I grumbled and slid my seat forwards, back to it's original position. I swung myself out of the small car and stumbled around to the trunk. It was already open, as Keli had already taken her pack out. I grabbed my pack and swung the trunk shut.
"Do a check fuzz brain. Make sure you have everything." Keli chided at my groggy figure. I rummaged through my pockets to find my list. I looked over it, mentally checking that I had everything. I nodded my head when I had finished. She nodded back and we set off onto the trail.
We walked in comfortable silence for the first hour of the trek. The scenery was beautiful and the sound of the wilderness surrounded us. We crossed over a river a few times on some sturdy wooden bridge. The sun flickered through the leaves high above us, creating a mottled pattern on the dirt track beneath our feet. The stones under our shoes crunched as we walked over them, a loud sound echoing in the serene silence.
I got a sudden headache and stopped walking. Keli stopped soon after I did and asked, "What's up?" I didn't register her words until about a minute later. A fog was creeping into my mind and it was starting to impair my vision. I could feel my memories getting flushed out of my head as the time progressed. Before I could answer Keli's question, I had already forgotten her name.
The only thing that I could think of to say was,"Who are you?" Keli took a few steps backwards and had a shocked expression on her face. "Are you kidding me Jack? We've known each other since we were three!" She shouted, the sound echoing through the trails. I just shrugged my shoulders embarrassed. The fog in my head had grown so much, that I couldn't remember where I was. I stood up and brushed past the strange girl and said, "Sorry stranger, but I have to get out of here!" She just stared at me slack jawed. I started to stumble further down the trails, but the strange girl that was beside me grasped my arm and started to pull me the other way.
She continued at a fast pace, pulling me blindly down the track. Our heavy breathing was the only sound that I could hear in the wilderness. My dirty hiking sneakers scuffed along the ground as we moved. The small stones stuck out of the ground and they scuttled around as our sneakers cut their way through the dirt. A cloud of dust flew out behind us. The tip of my sneakers caught on a rock jutting out of the earth and the steel grip on my arm vanished as I plummeted towards the ground. My head rebounded off of the track and everything faded into darkness.
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A blinding white light and an annoying, high-pitched beeping noise yanked me out of the darkness. My first instinct was to open my eyes, but the light immediately stabbed them. I hissed and clamped my eyes shut again. I took a deep breath and tried again. I winced when the light punctured my eyes again, but I kept them slightly open and allowed them to adjust. After a few seconds, the pain subsided slightly and I was able to take in my surroundings. I was in a hospital room, as I had predicted, and the walls were a bleak creamy white. Keli sat sleeping in one of the uncomfortable chairs on the other side of the room. I tried to call out to her to ask what happened, but all that came out was a dilapidated croak. I sighed when I looked to my left and saw a small tray with a tiny plastic cup of water. I drank it and scrunched my face up at the taste. It was like it had been sitting there for days, but I know that it only could have been a few hours, as Keli was still in her hiking clothes. I tried calling out to Keli again, and this time I was successful. She snorted and woke up, her sleepy eyes observing her surroundings. She zeroed in on me and jumped out of her chair.
She hugged me tightly and said, "You gave me such a fright! Don't ever do that to me again!" I just hugged her back and said, "I don't know what I did. What happened." She pulled away from the hug and stared me straight in the eyes. She shook her head and and said, "It's a long story." We laughed as she told the story. It only took a few hours for me to be discharged, and as we reached Keli's car, I said, "Let's go hike!" Keli shouted, "No!" We laughed and drove home in good spirits.